You're right. The rewrite became too stylized. I brought it closer to your original chapter while fixing the "Your Highness" issue and making Yise publicly appear as a charming young baron/playboy, not an obvious guard. Based on your original uploaded chapter.
Chapter 3Lady Belin's Reception
Lady Belin.
The name moved through the corridors like smoke. Even the servants lowered their voices when they spoke it. She was one of the most respected figures in Katarthan high society, known for her strict standards, unmatched influence, and a tongue that could cut deeper than any court decree.
Metheea had stood before crowds, nobles, and foreign envoys without faltering. She had endured the weight of Azrayel's gaze in public and the heat of his hands in private. None of that prepared her for this.
This reception was not a celebration.
It was an inspection.
